Worked example. Adult model only, not the child's task: Before: 'It ran.' Ask: Which animal do you mean, and where did it run? The writer chooses: 'The rabbit ran under the bench.' The first sentence has no missing word, but 'It' is unclear without context. The change names the animal and adds a place. Separately, 'The rabbit under the bench' could need 'ran' if that was the writer's intended action. Do not call a complete, clear sentence wrong.

Optional challenge. For Responding to Writing Feedback, return to the child’s own writing. Ask for feedback about one unclear part or useful detail. Let the child explain why they accept or decline the suggestion, then make a useful written change if one is needed and reread. Do not require changes to already-clear writing just to fill a quota.

What to notice. Keep before and after words plus one parent note: question asked, child’s response, rereading help, and written change. Record any missing word or unclear part the child located, or detection not observed. Mark adult-scribed words and other support. This session shows guided revision, not full source coverage or independent writing self-evaluation. No name or recording is needed.